Gemma's 5 sentence challenge
The train is
a colourful dark blue. The people are excited to go on the train. The numbers
tell you what gate you have to go in. When the train doors open the people go
inside. When they start to go the man tells them where to go.
Hi Gemma
ReplyDeleteYou really hooked me in to your writing with the adjectives you used in the first sentence. I also liked how you wrote how the characters were feeling. I wonder if you can think of some different words to start your sentences with?
From Mrs Burnett (Team 5SC)
www.uhpsroom172014.blogspot.co.nz
Auckland, NZ
Hi, Gemma. You are a good observer! you have noticed many details and have written them in your sentences. Well done, carry on like this.
ReplyDeleteFranco